Comments on Season 1

[Chloe C]

EVeryone's right, you did leave it in a very very mean place. You're evil! Chris kidnapping Chloe and Bianca helping the Halliwells? I actually felt sorry for Bianca, she never realised that turning Chris evil would mean he would turn out like every other demon, warlock and evil creature - completely soulless and unable to love. Although, I do wonder about Bianca, if she loves Chris there's obvisouly something good about her. I can't wait to see how that turns out. If Bianca helps them get Chris back, will something happen between Bianca and Chris, are you going to turn Bianca good?
But yeah, poor Chloe, always getting kidnapped, now I get why she doesn't like the whole magic thing if demons are using her as a way to Wyatt, but Chris is right, the way to his siblings is through their loves...

Anyway, we're going to have to wait two weeks, that's TWO WEEKS to find out how Chris is saved and what happens! Argh! You're really really mean!

[Chloe C]

OMG! You killed Bianca off! Wow! I never saw that one coming. I did wonder what you were going to do with her, but I thought you might bring her in as a Cole type character, I didn't think you'd get rid of her. You really took her out of Chris' life, and made Chris do it too! That makes it doubly interesting. I'm glad Chloe was saved, and what was better you brought Stephanie into do it too. I'm glad you're not just forgetting about characters that you've brought it, that really annoyed me about Charmed
What was great was that while you saved Chloe, Chris was still evil and then went on to do some really mean things - he really got the girls in this episode though, didn't he. Jennifer too! That was mean, although I'm not liking her too much, she's not staying in it now, is she? Although, I am interested in whether RYan will find out the truth about what Chris did with his little sister, surely Mel won't keep it from him for too long.
Anyway, great episode. Two weeks to the next one.

[likestories]

Let's face it, this was the best story so far.
I was really surprised that Chris killed Bianca just like that. I mean, you know me, I don't want her and a good Chris together so she had to leave somehow. but to kill her off like this. And by Chris' hand even more so.
I don't care about this Jennifer girl. Evil or not at least Chris was single. She was engaged and therefore shouldn't have slept with Chris.
I would like to see how Ryan will react. I really hope that he finds out. Won't be too good for Chris but surely interesting to read.
I have to admit I had already forgotten about Stephanie. But that's okay.
Can't wait for the next episode. I hope you will at least mention in the next one what had happened here. I sometimes hated it so much in Charmed. Something important happened in one episode and in the next one it was never mentioned ever again.
Really great work.

[Lexi]

Thank you, Mona, and don't worry things from this episode will be mentioned in the next episode. I do like my continuity (sp?), I keep checking back to see what's important that I need to mention every now and again.
I'm really glad you liked the episode, both of you, this had been my favouite episode to write up to then, and I will admit that I am a little further into the series now (although not as far as I wanted to be) so I do have new favourite episodes that I'm writing.
Thanks again for the comments x

[likestories]

You know an update coming as a surprise is not that bad.

Although I have to say that I don't like wedding episodes much. I guess I'm just not a wedding person. I don't know. It's too much stress for a one day-event
Anyway, I like the idea of another prophecy. Until now no Halliwell has ever stayed with a demon and -its not that I don't want Ryan and Mel stay together - but I think it's really strange if these two really start a family and live happily ever after as a Halliwell witch and a demon no matter if the demon is good (Can demons be good? It's a bit paradox. You need another word for it then.) But I have a feeling like that is exactly what is going to happen. I'm not sure if I like that. Too less drama I guess.
At least Prue got a chance to come back. Although, I'm wondering what the mortal guests thought of that one.
I have to admit this won't become one of my favorite episodes. But it was once again great written. There was fun and drama and some fantastic quotes.

I hope you will be able to do your coursework again. It's really annoying that you depend on a computer that much. Mine broke down last December. I was really happy that I could get all my data down. Well, not all. The music was gone and the photos. But luckily that was all saved on a CD as well.
I'd say don't worry about the updates. It's much more important that the important stuff for uni is done in time. We can wait. After all it's just for fun.

[matthew]

Lexi, I would suggest that you take a look at the last episode as the last scene was posted twice. I think you should sort that out. But other than that, it was a pretty cool episode, nice one really. ;D

[likestories]

What a great new episode! I always like it when the episode plays in some other plane or time line. Moreover, as Henry was the main character here you finally could develop some kind of relationship toward him. In the other episodes I couldn't really see what kind of person he is. He had a character but was always a bit behind the others. I think I even like him but I will have to see more of him. But I'm sure there will be some troubles for him with Keeley. I don't get why a demon kept a demon in a dream world. Did they work together?

I have to admit I didn't miss Mel at all ;D I don't know why. First I really liked her but now. I had this feeling like she was always in the foreground.
Have you ever count the words the characters are speaking in one episode? I know in a lot of TV series they really do count the words or lines because the main characters have to speak that much and the others that much. Something with the payment, I guess. It's all about the money, anyway


I'm really grateful that you decided to pick up this series again. I guess, it's a lot work to re-write everything. It's so frustrating when you loose stuff like this. On the one side it's nothing important like school stuff or from work but on the other side it's so much work to get this all written and then it's gone.
I still hope you will get your hard-drive back somehow.

[Lexi]

Cheers Matt, that's now sorted out.
And thanks Mona for the comments. I'm glad you liked Henry being at the forefront of the episode. I fgured it was about time I did an episode on him so people could see his character a little more.
And about Mel, don't worry, she isn't going to have a main role in a few episodes, I'm trying to bring the characters out for both Pru and Henry at the moment.
No, I don't count how many words they say, it never really occurred to me. I just take a look at who I think would be better to handle a certain role - looking at what powers they all have and see what mess I can put them in.
And Keely being kept in the dream world by the demon, that is going to be answered in few episodes time. Actually, she doen't show up again for about six episodes, since there are other things happening, but when she does her story will be told a little more and why she was in the dreamworld, but for now, I'm going to have to leave the question unanswered.

As for what I lost, I did lose some of my university work, which is why I haven't got the time to re-write both series and had to pick which one I was going to do. The main reason it turned out to be Angels and Demons is, as I already said, I don't want to re-write Progeny, since I was happy with the episodes. Angels and Demons has always had the chance to get better, it's meant I can look at the characters again and really think about who I could use in different situations. But hopefully my hard drive will be back soon, fingers crossed.

[Chloe C]

Ok, so I wasn't too into the Wedding episode, not my favourite, but I did like the new prophecy that came to light. I'm wondering who it will be though, with who it refers to. Like was said in the episode, it may not be Melinda and Ryan. I hope it isn't, in a way, something tells me that its just a little too expected.
Like Mona has said, I'm not too into Melinda right now. She does seem to take control a little too much, so two episodes in a row where she's hardly been in it were fine by me. I love that you put Henry as the main character for this one and that he had to figure things out without his cousins around.
Keely was a bit of a twist, I didn't see her being a demon! I'm wondering about her because I re-read the episode outlines to see if there were any clues about her and there's nothing. So I have to wait about 6 episodes until she turns up, I think I can wait that long, but it depends on what you have planned for those episodes. It isn't going to be another Phoebe/Cole thing though, is it? Because that's a little too predictable.
Anyway, I'm already knocking you down for things you haven't written yet, but you know me, you have done for years, so you know I speak my mind. It's probably a good job that you know me, otherwise I think you'd de-karma me or something.
Anyway, I did really enjoy the second episode that I read, loved the idea of another plane. So, great job can't wait for next week.

[likestories]

Finally I found some time to read the last to stories. Here are my comments for both ;D

1x13
I have to admit I was a bit disappointed by this episode. It was of course well written just like all the others always are. But it was exactly the same as the Charmed episode 'Sin Francisco'. I love this episode. It's one of my favorites. Really great. Leo as the lazy one. "I wanted to go up there but I got so tired on the way' ( he says something like that) So great. You found the right sins for all the characters. There is no doubt. But I have to say that I missed that they really talked Wyatt's jealousy out. It happened and they all said "You don't have to be jealous" There could have been more about that. The problem I had with that episode is just that there was nothing new. I mean they got rid of their sins exactly like the Charmed Ones had. They could have just asked Piper, Phoebe or Leo and that's it. I understand you tried to explain it with the fact that something like this should happen every 20 years.
It was a nice little episode. But nothing more than a filler.
I missed one of your special ideas. Something new out of the old topic.

1x14
Much better episode. It's great that Pru got her chance to have an episode written around her. My personal problem with Prue is that I don't know the actress that plays her. Every time I read her sentences I have no face. Really stupid I guess. but that makes it difficult for me to build up a relationship toward her character. But I guess as long as she hasn't her power in control I will have some chances to get to know her better. Cool power by the way. I don't understand exactly how it should work but it's a great idea to advance empathy in some way. (That's just what makes your episodes so great. There is everything we already know from the original series but with an extra idea. That's what I missed with the last episode).
I don't really care about Chloe and Wyatt. If she wants to, she can go. I haven't seen her personality enough to like or not like her. I pretty much don't care about her. The only use she had so far was a a bait for Wyatt.
In this episode I could imagine Henry so good. That's the effect of 'his' episode. I really have a great feeling to wards him and I like his character a lot. I hope I will feel the same about Pru soon.

A new mysterious character: Sarah. Can't wait to find out what you have planned for her.

I once again have a problem with Ryan. First I didn't like him, then I liked him a lot and now I'm really skeptical about him. He's a demon but he seems to be more a witch then the Halliwells. The only demonic thing he does is the shimmering. Seriously, soon he starts to mix potions and write spells. I do understand he may be a demon but he was raised my mortals and was raised to be good and that's great. But I'd rather like him to be more 'demonic' or more 'mortal' but not so witch, whitelighter like. He acts like he was one of the Halliwell witches sometimes. Moreover, I think he has a too large part in the series. He's just Mel's husband. I don't need to read more of him than of Chris or Wyatt. Especially as there now is Liam their whitelighter. Let's have Liam doing the whitelighter stuff and Ryan the husband stuff. he can worry about Mel and he can help but not so much. It's not his duty to fight against demons, it's the Halliwells.

I see that this series is more focused on the new Power of Three instead of Chris and Wyatt and that's fine but then the three characters have to do the main part and not someone else.

There are two things I was wondering about. I don't know in which episode it was but you said Chris was 6 years in NY. But if he is 22 now, he went to NY with 16. I maybe have wrong numbers in my head but I thought you hit college with 18 and then he only could have stayed there 4 years and that's the time you usually study in a college in the US. Right or wrong? I'm not sure anymore.
And the second thing is Ryan. He is a demon, no whitelighter and still he can hear people calling for him like whitelighters do with charges. One more thing that makes him less demon and more good witch-lighter. I have never heard a demon could do that.

I hope you are not mad that I pointed out some things that I don't like so much. It's still a great series and lot of fun to read. But this were the few things I noticed by reading. I'm sure comments include slight critique from time to time.

[Lexi]

Hey, no feel free to point out the bad points too, they help me write better episodes.

Episode 1x13, I totally understand. To be honest, I wasn't in the best of moods to write it, since it was the first episode that I had to write from scratch after losing all my work, the other two I had notes stashed around my computer about them, racking my brain for what I wrote was kinda hard, so I did just throw it in as a filler episode, but made the way to get rid of Chris' pride slightly different.

As for 1x14, where do I start?
I've got to thank you for the detailed comment .
First of all, Pru - the actress I had in mind (KAtharine Isabelle) was in a couple of episodes of Supernatural (All Hell Breaks Loose part 1 and I can't remember the name of the other) and played Ginger in Ginger Snaps. If it wasn't for watching them then I wouldn't have had a clue who she was either.
Chris: He's 24 in the series, so moved to New York when he was 18. Hope that answers that question.
Ryan: he grew up with Wyatt and Chris, and I have been planning on doing a few stories of when they were in high school, so grew up helping in them with demons. He's never going to start writing spells or mixing potions. All his powers are demonic, and he uses them from time to time. As for him hearing calls, I always thought demons could, since Cole could hear if Phoebe was calling for him and could sense where he was shimmering into. Its not exactly the same as a Whitelighter's ability, but it is similar.
I'm trying to keep the story about all of them, rather than just focusing on the power of three.

But thanks for the critism, it does help me a lot, I like to know if there was something people didn't really like that much.

[matthew]

I cannot believe you just left it there, flipping hell.....i cant wait for the next episode, damn, long way awayyy, i cant...update sooooonn, please i m on my knees......

[Lexi]

You know when the updates are going to be. No need to say "update soon", new episode every sunday

[matthew]

i m so sued to type update soon to every fic i read, i wrote the same here, LOL> my bad....

[Chloe C]

OMG I can't believe I've missed so many episodes again. I swear, I hate this time of year, too many assignments to hand in and exams to revise for.
So, I can't comment on every single episode I've missed, there's at least three of them, I'll just leave a comment on what was good and bad overall.
I've got to agree with Mona, the sins episode not your best work, but I still enjoyed reading it, just to see who was going to be infected with what and which ones were actually going to be affected.
My favourite one was this weeks though, with Barbus coming back into play. He is like so far mymost favourite demon ever and I was really looking forward to you bringing him back, even if it is just for two weeks. Turning Wyatt evil was interesting - as in the way you did it. I'm sure Barbus could have done it with his own powers, you know just make Wyatt seem evil, but to go to another demon and actually turn him evil....interesting......I'm guessing you've done that for a reason and I can't wait to find out next week what it was all for.
So, another five days until the second part, although I know I probably won't catch it on sunday and it'll probably be another few weeks, but hey hey, I'll get to read it soon and I know it will definitely be interesting with you.
So, great job on the last few episodes. Good luck with your exams, whenever they start and talk later xxx